I am a Year 6 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Kia ora Kavel, thank you for sharing your report about Japan and the Olympics. I like how you started with a rhetorical question - I bet you would choose Japan! Next time I would like you to work on putting all of the information into your own sentences, like how you have with your introduction.
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
hi kavel i just want you to just fix some mistakes to make your writing a little more cool other then that have lovely good day.
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ReplyDeleteKia ora Kavel, thank you for sharing your report about Japan and the Olympics. I like how you started with a rhetorical question - I bet you would choose Japan! Next time I would like you to work on putting all of the information into your own sentences, like how you have with your introduction.
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