I am a Year 6 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Kia ora Kavel, thank you for sharing your descriptive writing. I like how you have used adjectives and personification to show what the poppies look like. What other senses could you think about while you are describing?
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Kia ora Kavel, thank you for sharing your descriptive writing. I like how you have used adjectives and personification to show what the poppies look like. What other senses could you think about while you are describing?
ReplyDeleteKia ora kavel i like your story you could improve by adding more descriptive writing and you could make it longer to but I still like your writing.
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